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SW: Bait - C02P12

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Page 12 is here!

[edit:18/03/09] Tweaked leg in panel 2. Added lamp's SFX.
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Aeden-Sagen's avatar
Yaaay!

Your lamp looks so small compared to mine. Awesometastic, though.

Might I suggest you make Bait's right lower leg in panel 2 bend less inwards? It kind of looks like he's trying to hook his right leg into his left one... Or make the transition from upper to lower leg a bit smoother... It would look a lot more natural. But that panel is good speed-wise. It looks a lot like he's getting up quickly. And that's just awesome.

The next panel seems to have lost a bit of speed, though. My suggestions would be to make Bait's hair less vertical. Have it be moved by the speed. Maybe even add some more speed lines, if you're daring.

By the way, Bait looks really good in the first panel. Nose, jawline, hair. Kickass.